jbfairybird wrote:
Hi.
I liked the chapter. The speech seems pretty natural to me. I do think it was a little short though. That's my only complaint but then I do tend to get a little wordy at times so I may not be best judge of that. lol.
Yeah. I think I'm going to use more pictures, and then space out the lines so it looks like there are more words so that the chapters are longer. And I'm probably going to try to stop with the half chapters. I want to put more words on there, but when I sit down the write this they aren't flowing as well as they usually are. I probably need to work a little on my patience, and work on perfecting the text. Rewriting and stuff.
