SLAHP4 wrote:
Brigid wrote:
Its ok. I know the first round and some of the scoring procedures are a little weird to get used to the first round. That's why I don't have elimination. Your picture was good, it was just the storytelling aspect that didn't work as well without the story you provided which I don't use in judging. But I think now it'll be easier to understand :)
Yeah my song wasn't as good as I thought. It just repeated itself and then some of them would've been even worst. I love to write truly but sometimes it just stumps me.
I got Yesterday by The Beatles Cycle 1 and I have to tell you - I know exactly how that feels. Those songs that you think have so much meaning and you're so excited to work with and then you actually look at the lyrics...and you're like, "oh crap..."
Personally, I would've done this:
"I felt all flushed with fever
Embarrassed by the crowd
I felt he found my letters
And read each one out loud"
You have to understand that these lyrics aren't literal. She felt like he did those things - but he didn't. I would've gone in kind of a school setting. Had a girl being obviously embarrassed by a boy who is laughing and making a fool of her. Then you could have a thought bubble or something of them in a classroom and her staring at him with that look a girl has when she sees her crush. Then the person looking at the picture and seeing the lyrics could be like, "Ah, she must've liked him and now he's making a fool out of her...and it's as if he found every love letter addressed to him and was reading it to the entire populace." Get it?
I also want to add that I feel like that entire song is about a strangely deep emotional feeling that a woman is having towards a musician's song. Like...literally. The song speaks to her so much that it's killing her softly...she's embarrassed...it feels like he found her letters and is reading them out loud in this one little song.
Or I'm just being weird.
