Between2Worlds [Story] 06/04
https://i.ibb.co/xYcr7Zv/B2-WPart2-Banner.jpg Prologue here. Prologue here.
Forum Discussion
Hey everyone!
Now that I'm at the end of Season 1, I've drafted a monstrous list of questions and thought I'd share here too if you guys would like to give your comments/feedback on what you think about B2W :blush:
As most of you know, this is my first writing experience and while I've learnt a lot from writing, I'm sure I can learn much more from your responses. Most of you have actually given me your feedback after every chapter and especially the final chapter. Thank you so much I loved reading everything and felt like a happy sponge! But if you want to give critique, this is the best time to do so! Otherwise if there's anything bothering you, they may be brought into Season 2! :# :astonished:
You can pick which questions to respond to (or simply respond to all of them and lose a precious day of your life. :tongue: Thank you so much @ThePlumbob for the great idea and @ThePlumbob @_sims_Yimi for already tackling the questions! And to @Maladi777 You were already giving critique as you read so I want to give you a big hug and shoutout here anyway <3 :smiley:
Endgame Story Analysis Questions
I overwhelmed myself writing this so I can't imagine you answering them all. Just pick and choose if interested :smile:
General:
1. Did you enjoy the story?
2. What was your favourite part, and which was your least favourite part?
3. How do you feel about the ending?
4. Do you feel like the story was different from what you expected when you started?
5. What do you think of the darkness from chapter 6 until the end? Was the darkness too much, not much, present but not bad, present but bad? etc
6. What are your predictions for S2? Feel free to answer everything else before attempting this. :lol:
Story:
Writing
Character:
And here is a happy gameplay picture that has nothing to do with Season 2 storyline :lol:
https://i.ibb.co/7pSbTLW/B2-W-S2-Rescaled.jpg
Now that I'm at the end of Season 1, I've drafted a monstrous list of questions and thought I'd share here too if you guys would like to give your comments/feedback on what you think about B2W :blush:
As most of you know, this is my first writing experience and while I've learnt a lot from writing, I'm sure I can learn much more from your responses. Most of you have actually given me your feedback after every chapter and especially the final chapter. Thank you so much I loved reading everything and felt like a happy sponge! But if you want to give critique, this is the best time to do so! Otherwise if there's anything bothering you, they may be brought into Season 2! :# :astonished:
You can pick which questions to respond to (or simply respond to all of them and lose a precious day of your life. :tongue: Thank you so much @ThePlumbob for the great idea and @ThePlumbob @_sims_Yimi for already tackling the questions! And to @Maladi777 You were already giving critique as you read so I want to give you a big hug and shoutout here anyway <3 :smiley:
Endgame Story Analysis Questions
I overwhelmed myself writing this so I can't imagine you answering them all. Just pick and choose if interested :smile:
General:
1. Did you enjoy the story?
2. What was your favourite part, and which was your least favourite part?
3. How do you feel about the ending?
4. Do you feel like the story was different from what you expected when you started?
5. What do you think of the darkness from chapter 6 until the end? Was the darkness too much, not much, present but not bad, present but bad? etc
6. What are your predictions for S2? Feel free to answer everything else before attempting this. :lol:
Story:
Spoiler
- What did you think about the comic strip ch. 6.4? Did it adequately summarise Curtis's role? Were there any plot holes? Any thoughts on its delivery?
- What do you think of Athena and Curtis's Not-date scene at the promenade?
- What do you think of the progression of Athena and Curtis’s relationship from strangers to lovers?
- Did it flow realistically? Did any parts feel forced or too fast?
- Their romance was never intended to be ‘pure’, even if it started out that way. Did you catch it as a reader? Did you realise at any point a shift beginning to happen? Where? Did you catch yourself responding to it?
- How would you describe their romance/relationship?
- Grim's explanation of the cycle of life/death: Do you have any pressing questions? What else would you have liked to know?
- What do you think of Curtis's neighborhood shown from Athena's perspective? Was it believable? Did it make you respond in any way? (thoughts or feelings) Was it effective in its delivery of mood/message/setting? Did it make what comes after (Mercy) believable/possible?
- What is your view on ‘Mercy’ chapters (Assault)? Were they handled appropriately? Can they be handled better? Did they deter you from reading further? Did they change your impression of the story? Were you expecting them?
- What is your view on ‘Memories’ chapter (Curtis)? Were they handled appropriately? Were they portrayed realistically? Were they and the characters portrayed believable? Were the scenes portrayed, haunting enough for Curtis to revolve his entire life around revenge and locking Scorcher away?
- There is a darkness that looms over chapters 14.4, 16.4 and 16.5. Was the mood obvious to you or too subtle? Did it affect these chapters and your desire to read them?
What do you think of Avery's revelation/Athena losing her memory in Chapters 15.1 - 15.4. How was the pacing? Did it feel realistic? Did any feel forced? What do you think of Avery's backstory? Was it believable that Athena didn't realise what she was doing?
- What do you think of the NSFW poem chapter? Was the poem hard to decipher? Did the pictures make the process tougher? Was it a cringe chapter?
Did all of these scenarios make sense to you? Were they believable?
- Curtis kept in the dark about his identity
- Curtis having his own home
- Curtis being able to survive despite his lifestyle at such a young age
- Curtis’s complete out of character aggression, manipulation and exploitation of Athena at Trevor’s house
- Athena’s complete out of character aggression, loosened and unhinged behavior at Trevor’s house
- Trevor’s fixation on Athena
Writing
Spoiler
- Were there any themes that stood out for you in this story? How do you think I handled them?
- What do you think of my balancing action/non-action scenes, thrill/non-thrill? Were you able to wind down before the next one, or is the story's arrangement fine with you? Some have told me they needed to take a break from the story because it was so uh full on(?). How was it for you?
- There’s a shift in my writing style/length between chapter 1-5 and the rest of the story. I also experimented with different mediums. What do you think of:
- I overly rely on pictures to describe the setting than write it out. Does this style work for you?
- Romance is hard to write and personal. There are some scenes and pictures that were too much for me in the story, but I’m a conservative person. How were they for you? Were any of them cringey? If yes, which one? so I can work on those. And do you have suggestions?
- What do you think of my balancing action/non-action scenes, thrill/non-thrill? Were you able to wind down before the next one, or is the story's arrangement fine with you? Some have told me they needed to take a break from the story because it was so uh full on(?). How was it for you?
- There’s a shift in my writing style/length between chapter 1-5 and the rest of the story. I also experimented with different mediums. What do you think of:
- The comic strip? Was its organisation easy to follow? Were the Speech bubbles clear who’s talking and who’s next?
- Picture Sequences: Did you prefer the speech text organised around the subject in the picture? Or placed at the bottom and color coded?
- Do you like this randomness of switching mediums? :lol:
- At some point I tried to add more descriptions/elaboration of the setting and ambience than moving the story along. (Chapter 14.2 and 14.21) What do you think of the writing in these chapters compared to the rest of my writing? Do you have a preference? (If there’s no difference you can say that too. :lol: )
- I overly rely on pictures to describe the setting than write it out. Does this style work for you?
- Romance is hard to write and personal. There are some scenes and pictures that were too much for me in the story, but I’m a conservative person. How were they for you? Were any of them cringey? If yes, which one? so I can work on those. And do you have suggestions?
Character:
Spoiler
1. What are Athena's strengths and weaknesses? What do you think of Athena’s Character progression/development? How would you describe her?
- Is her character realistic? Is she adequately fleshed out for reader understanding?
- Any bits of her that you find confusing?
- What kind of person do you think she has become at the end of this story? What kind of person do you predict her to be in B2W?
- She insists that Curtis is relatable and her soulmate at the lighthouse scene. Did you find her insistence of them being made for each other believable? Do you have a theory why she thinks so? (I’ve never elaborated on this)
2. What are Curtis's strength and weaknesses? What do you think of Curtis’s Character progression/development? How would you describe him?
- Is he realistic and adequately fleshed out for reader understanding?
- Did you find it strange that he cared for Athena with his background staring at violence every day?
I know I did a lot of explaining of Masato and Kirino’s character in the comments. But without the comments and purely relying on story:
3.Is Masato a believable character?Does his character/personality, his motivations, and actions make sense to you? Is his love for Kirino surprising? Does his metaphoric speech make sense to you? Did the final reveal provide ample explanation of all the schemey scenes he was portrayed in throughout the story? Did everything make sense?
4.Is Kirino a believable character? Does her character, desires and actions (including final action :( ) make sense to you?
- Did her scene at the end come as a complete surprise? Were there enough clues given throughout the story for you to find her condition at the end believable/acceptable?
- Was her ‘flashback’ chapter believable?
- Do you think she loves Masato (at the end)?
5.Were Masato and Kirino’s complicated relationship believable?
6.Is Scorcher a believable character? Does his character, desires and actions make sense to you? (I think I gave him a monologue and two lines of dialogue explaining his perspective on life lol)
7. What do you think about Kian? Then Carly?
8. What do you think/feel about Dew?
9. What do you think about Grim?
- Is her character realistic? Is she adequately fleshed out for reader understanding?
- Any bits of her that you find confusing?
- What kind of person do you think she has become at the end of this story? What kind of person do you predict her to be in B2W?
- She insists that Curtis is relatable and her soulmate at the lighthouse scene. Did you find her insistence of them being made for each other believable? Do you have a theory why she thinks so? (I’ve never elaborated on this)
2. What are Curtis's strength and weaknesses? What do you think of Curtis’s Character progression/development? How would you describe him?
- Is he realistic and adequately fleshed out for reader understanding?
- Did you find it strange that he cared for Athena with his background staring at violence every day?
I know I did a lot of explaining of Masato and Kirino’s character in the comments. But without the comments and purely relying on story:
3.Is Masato a believable character?Does his character/personality, his motivations, and actions make sense to you? Is his love for Kirino surprising? Does his metaphoric speech make sense to you? Did the final reveal provide ample explanation of all the schemey scenes he was portrayed in throughout the story? Did everything make sense?
4.Is Kirino a believable character? Does her character, desires and actions (including final action :( ) make sense to you?
- Did her scene at the end come as a complete surprise? Were there enough clues given throughout the story for you to find her condition at the end believable/acceptable?
- Was her ‘flashback’ chapter believable?
- Do you think she loves Masato (at the end)?
5.Were Masato and Kirino’s complicated relationship believable?
6.Is Scorcher a believable character? Does his character, desires and actions make sense to you? (I think I gave him a monologue and two lines of dialogue explaining his perspective on life lol)
7. What do you think about Kian? Then Carly?
8. What do you think/feel about Dew?
9. What do you think about Grim?
