Under The Tartosan Sun
Table of contents: [ Spoiler ] Since this story has grown so much bigger than I ever imagined I feel like its time to borrow a page from some of my favorite SimLit writers and offer you a syn...
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"GalacticGal;c-18209793" wrote:"DaniRose2143;c-18209787" wrote:
@hanuelSpoilerIts probably just part of being creative, but I am my own harshest critic. I am surprised and touched by the response to this chapter in general, and Hannah in particular. I'm already tossing around ideas to have her be a bigger part of the story than I thought at first. I was fairly sure readers would like her, I just didn't expect how much.
It's definitely a writer/artist thing. I really treat myself with a rather sharp blade when it comes to self-critique. (I actually placed a novel I was writing in the garbage once in my angst. Oddly enough, Hubby was the one who rescued it.)
While I enjoyed the latest chapter of your story, my only critique would be to steer clear of being preachy. That's difficult, I realize. I stopped watching Quincy years ago because everything was a Cause and they got way too preachy with it. The dialogue ceased to be natural. The original Star Trek V: Voyage Home was very subtle in their message about how we Humans must care for our planet and the possible long-range consequences if we didn't. It was all about the lack of Humpback whales.
Let the situation unfold, naturally. Perhaps show us how women are at a distinct disadvantage in certain worlds. Perhaps a bit of an 'argument' between a female character with the guy in charge being uppity. Rather than a long conversation that turns into a diatribe.
I'm only telling you this because you're one heck of a fine writer. And I do hope you take it in the spirit it's given. If I didn't care I would remain mute.
I'm going to agree with @GalacticGal here...
First, more often than not, we are our own harshest critics. For me, that's one of the reasons I love getting and giving feedback here... the support and encouragement.
Second, I will agree about the importance of the old axiom "show, don't tell" ... it's always more engaging storytelling to "show" something than just talk about it. It's something I struggle with often in my writing.
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