Beautiful Little Fools [Updated: 5/27/20]

"ArcherDK;c-17485191" wrote:

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Well now, thus us definitely getting interesting. I like the interactions and chemistry between the characters and the overall clear nature of it. Aspen can't stand Dahlia and it shows very clearly. I also like that despite their attempts it is clear that there is a lot of tension between each and every one of them. The chapter definitely establishes characters in many ways. Aster wants to be always number one and doesn't like competition. ASpen is too much like her brother, but in more subtle way. Hana is too proud of her work and doesn't accept criticism and so on.

I have to point out that character design, in my opinion, makes some of them look a bit too similar. It can be difficult to differentiate if they're all in one picture. Perhaps focusing only on a few of them at a time and giving them something to stand out would help? It could be just me, though.

Also - the lighting makes it sometimes difficult to see the details.

Overall definitely the best chapter so far. Keep up the good work :)