Between2Worlds [Story] 06/04
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Just read chapters 7,8 and 9 and boy oh boy does it get better.
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First of all - a huge kudos to you for bringing up such a...terrible...topic. You know what I'm talking about. Chapters 8 and 9 break the knight-damsel story by showing the filth and dirty business of life of shadows AND exposing Athena to...indecency. Well done. I salute your bravery.
With that said - and I under NO circumstances belittle such a horrible experience - I find it very hard to feel bad for Athena. Unfortunately, she's completed her transition into Mary Sue character. She whined, complained, demanded and remained arrogant while so many people told her to stop. Had she listened for even ONE second... Again - what happened to her is horrible. Disgusting. Monstrous. But she has brought it onto herself.
On the topic of Grim - EASILY the best character in the story. Bar none. He tried to help, he remained polite no matter what and is genuinely likable.
Now onto something negative. If the story had absolutely no magic except for grim, it wouldn't lose anything. Replace magical wand with a pistol and teleportation with parkour. Little would be lost. It's not "Betwwen2Worlds" it's "OutOfThisWorld". If that makes any sense.
I must stress that under no circumstances I attack the Author personally or belittle her skill and talent. Nothing of what I say comes from authority and shouldn't be taken as absolute truth. Thank you.
With that said - and I under NO circumstances belittle such a horrible experience - I find it very hard to feel bad for Athena. Unfortunately, she's completed her transition into Mary Sue character. She whined, complained, demanded and remained arrogant while so many people told her to stop. Had she listened for even ONE second... Again - what happened to her is horrible. Disgusting. Monstrous. But she has brought it onto herself.
On the topic of Grim - EASILY the best character in the story. Bar none. He tried to help, he remained polite no matter what and is genuinely likable.
Now onto something negative. If the story had absolutely no magic except for grim, it wouldn't lose anything. Replace magical wand with a pistol and teleportation with parkour. Little would be lost. It's not "Betwwen2Worlds" it's "OutOfThisWorld". If that makes any sense.
I must stress that under no circumstances I attack the Author personally or belittle her skill and talent. Nothing of what I say comes from authority and shouldn't be taken as absolute truth. Thank you.
