Between2Worlds [Story] 06/04
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Forum Discussion
@ArcherDK Thank you for your feedback. :smile:
Spoiler
I'm replying by paragraph.
1. This is great feedback. Do you mean to say the writer did not flesh out Curtis's character enough to make an impression? Or is it that his character design doesn't appeal to you? I'd appreciate it if you could explain why too.
2. Ah unfortunately I will have to disappoint you there. Masato's intention of involving Athena is simply to manipulate Curtis into becoming his 'willing tool' for the rest of Curtis's life. Masato's design is one who doesn't force someone to adopt his principles, rather plants ideas that make his targets (Curtis) believe they had a choice in their path, to which he never did the whole time, and that they will in the end choose the path Masato wants them to take. (I hope this makes sense!)
3. I've had Curtis's backstory since Ch 1. And I have like you, thought my presentation of his background to be unoriginal, but I didn't know how to present it any other way. :sweat_smile: Thank you for your feedback, it confirms my suspicion. If I encounter a similar writing situation like this again, I'll keep this in mind.
4. Your foresight is spot on. ;) I'll just add students and staff there for you.
5. I didn't want to say this in your earlier analyses because I didn't want it to be a spoiler, but yes you were right about the direction of her character, Athena desperately needed a reality check and Dew is there to provide it. This is a 'serving of humble pie' for Athena. I say this with as much endearment as possible because in the end I made her. Her flaws are my undoing <3 :smile:
I'm replying by paragraph.
1. This is great feedback. Do you mean to say the writer did not flesh out Curtis's character enough to make an impression? Or is it that his character design doesn't appeal to you? I'd appreciate it if you could explain why too.
2. Ah unfortunately I will have to disappoint you there. Masato's intention of involving Athena is simply to manipulate Curtis into becoming his 'willing tool' for the rest of Curtis's life. Masato's design is one who doesn't force someone to adopt his principles, rather plants ideas that make his targets (Curtis) believe they had a choice in their path, to which he never did the whole time, and that they will in the end choose the path Masato wants them to take. (I hope this makes sense!)
3. I've had Curtis's backstory since Ch 1. And I have like you, thought my presentation of his background to be unoriginal, but I didn't know how to present it any other way. :sweat_smile: Thank you for your feedback, it confirms my suspicion. If I encounter a similar writing situation like this again, I'll keep this in mind.
4. Your foresight is spot on. ;) I'll just add students and staff there for you.
5. I didn't want to say this in your earlier analyses because I didn't want it to be a spoiler, but yes you were right about the direction of her character, Athena desperately needed a reality check and Dew is there to provide it. This is a 'serving of humble pie' for Athena. I say this with as much endearment as possible because in the end I made her. Her flaws are my undoing <3 :smile:
