Between2Worlds [Story] 06/04
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Chapter 12.
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Lighthouse moment is an excellent way to show Curtis' and Athena's much needed heart-to-heart. The pain that the situation is causing them is almost palpable, believable Overall, it is a good way to demonstrate reason vs heart battle that never ends well.
It also demonstrates that Athena is still a child despite everything she has seen. She listens to her heart and tries to cling to high morals. While commendable, it is something that belongs in tales for kids. In reality, things sometimes just have to be done. Curtis understands this. And while I perfectly understand that he is still a human being who yearns for pleasures of life, I thing he should've pushed Athena away. Too bad that Athena doesn't listen. I'd say that a heartbreak would actually be good for her. While I know what it's like and how much it hurts, it would help her grow and mature.
The comic part has one crippling design flaw - while text over bright sky. Some words are invisible.
The pursuit section really evokes the feeling of dread and urgency. With that said, It got resolved in a somewhat cheap way. Magic the problem away. Yes, I know that I'm over exaggerating, but it feels a bit underwhelming. But there is definitely something that cheapens the experience - the fact that Athena didn't really hurt anybody. THAT would be actually good. I mean, really - she casts spells left right and center. She is no virtuoso. Somebody was bound to get hurt or killed. That would actually be VERY interesting,
Overall, a very solid chapter.
It also demonstrates that Athena is still a child despite everything she has seen. She listens to her heart and tries to cling to high morals. While commendable, it is something that belongs in tales for kids. In reality, things sometimes just have to be done. Curtis understands this. And while I perfectly understand that he is still a human being who yearns for pleasures of life, I thing he should've pushed Athena away. Too bad that Athena doesn't listen. I'd say that a heartbreak would actually be good for her. While I know what it's like and how much it hurts, it would help her grow and mature.
The comic part has one crippling design flaw - while text over bright sky. Some words are invisible.
The pursuit section really evokes the feeling of dread and urgency. With that said, It got resolved in a somewhat cheap way. Magic the problem away. Yes, I know that I'm over exaggerating, but it feels a bit underwhelming. But there is definitely something that cheapens the experience - the fact that Athena didn't really hurt anybody. THAT would be actually good. I mean, really - she casts spells left right and center. She is no virtuoso. Somebody was bound to get hurt or killed. That would actually be VERY interesting,
Overall, a very solid chapter.
