Monthly SimLit Short Story Challenge

I don't know why I keep doing this at the 11th hour but I struggled all month again. Last month it was screenshots and this time it's the story (or the presentation of the story, actually). I wrote the first draft at the beginning of May but I keep rewriting because it doesn't sound right. I'm missing the heart of the story. I know I'm getting closer, but I still don't see/feel it. If it gets to May 31 (very likely) I'll turn in what I have. But I'm not satisfied with it.