The Freezer Bunny Club - A Reading Circle

"Duvelina;c-17569826" wrote:

First of all, I loved the introduction to EXCES. I thought it was so interesting how you managed to introduce us to this fictional disease you thought of. It sounds terrifying, honestly. And I can imagine this wasn't a fun surprise for Kass.

I'm not a fan of her father and how he decided to come back into her life. I'm also confused on how he told her all of that, invited her on a roadtrip and then decided to keep himself out of the picture again. I presume to give Kass her space, but I don't think he tried to contact the other girls yet either? They'll need some time to get used to him too and they'll feel weird if Kass does decide to go on a roadtrip with him, because they had no time to process it yet. I'm also confused on why he would want just Kass on the roadtrip and none of the other girls. Well, maybe he does but a little heads-up would have been nice, just like he did with Kass (although maybe in a different way).

EXCES was kinda accidentally developed last time I wrote the story. Like I thought about cancer first, but then I realized I'm on a fictional planet and it makes sense to have a fictional disease. There's a lot more with aliens/supernaturals and EXCES in the future, but for now, you've at least got the basics.

As for Howard and his invite, he plans to extend the invite to his other daughters. There's a reason he told Kass first, and a reason he is hoping to bond with his eldest daughter. Also the fact that he talked to her and then gave her space is kind-of the author's fault. :# There's so much going on in this story. Sometimes it's hard to get back around to certain characters and things.

"Duvelina;c-17569826" wrote:


I was so excited for her! I didn't realise how curious and nosey she was until she got this job offer and the mysteries kept piling up. I feel like this job fits her like a glove. I do hope we get to see more of her actually on the job soon.

Yeah there are a lot of mysteries (probably too many -- I got carried away :# ). Kass' job will play a definite role in the story.

"Duvelina;c-17569826" wrote:

It's the first time we really got to see a huge chunk of them interacting. I like the casual friendship they have. They tease each other a lot and it feels like the fun, lighthearted kind of friendship. I don't always like Ayesha or Kass, but most of the time, I feel like they balance each other out nicely. In this arc and with these interactions, I came to like their friendship.

The girls do balance each other out some. It's a fun relationship. I know you've had opinions about Kass. She's not the most likable character and she's pretty flawed. Ayesha isn't perfect either. But I do enjoy writing their friendship dynamic.

"Duvelina;c-17569826" wrote:


Ayesha left them alone rather fast, so it'd be interesting to see more interaction between Ayesha and Davis later on. I love Davis and the more I read about him, the more I start to like him. I'm so excited about a relationship between Kass and Davis. Every step of the way I'm hoping nothing will get between them. I'm always looking forward to more moments between them. Especially because I'm at a part right now where he isn't in the picture all that much.

I'm glad Davis is getting so much love. I like his character too, a lot more this time around. He's getting a lot more "screen time" in the rewrite.

"Duvelina;c-17569826" wrote:

One of my favourite scenes. Kass was so bold! We hadn't seen that side of her yet and I loved it. It feels like that might be Ayesha's influence on her over the years, so I like that she is more loose sometimes. You managed to make it exciting with Clark walking past and not being sure whether they were going to get caught or not.

Oh you'll see a lot more of this side of Kass as time goes on. That's not all Ayesha. She is bold and clever... dangerously so sometimes. But for whom? You'll see. :lol: