Heffner Legacy: [Updated 09/05] 4.29 The Cold Shoulder

Hi everyone.
I've started the Build Newcrest Legacy Challenge and posted the first chapter. I'm all new to this and I was hoping someone would read it and tell me their opinion.
Here's the link: http://maladi.weebly.com/the-heffner-legacy.html

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4,015 Replies

Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
"sabreene;14262850" wrote:
This was so good! I love Beryl and Tony together. And gah, Tony just puts a smile on my face, that attitude of his, lol. Can't wait for more!!

You don't become a notorious elusive criminal without a healthy self-confidence. :smile:

Btw. I like you new sig banner.
pammiechick
Legend
10 years ago
Go Tony!!!! Get Beryl out of that mess! <3
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
Beryl despairs in chapter 2.12

http://s3.postimg.org/ofaa4wpir/chapter212.png
Julyvee94
10 years ago
Ooooomg ^^ Now I am really excited to see what happens next. Tony got her out after all
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
"Julyvee94;14278380" wrote:
Ooooomg ^^ Now I am really excited to see what happens next. Tony got her out after all

Did you doubt him? :wink: Thanks for reading!
Buttonsginger
10 years ago
What fun! I am really enjoying your story. I am only up to chapter 5 of generation 1. I can't wait to read more :smiley:
pammiechick
Legend
10 years ago
YAY! Way to jump on it, Tony! I love him and am excited to see their love/hate romance! Those are always the cutest!
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
"BUTTONSGINGER;14279121" wrote:
What fun! I am really enjoying your story. I am only up to chapter 5 of generation 1. I can't wait to read more :smiley:

Oh, thank you and welcome! Generation 2 is even better, you'll see. :wink: Can't wait until you catch up!

"pammiechick;14279122" wrote:
YAY! Way to jump on it, Tony! I love him and am excited to see their love/hate romance! Those are always the cutest!

I'm glad I managed to write Tony the way that made you love him, cause I do love him too!
Sabreene
10 years ago
Oh, so good! Maybe being brought it did her good -- gave her time to admit her feelings to herself! Can't wait to see what happens next. (And thank you for the comment about my banner - I totally missed it until now, doh!)
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
"sabreene;14281789" wrote:
Oh, so good! Maybe being brought it did her good -- gave her time to admit her feelings to herself! Can't wait to see what happens next. (And thank you for the comment about my banner - I totally missed it until now, doh!)

Exactly! Everything was happening too fast and she needed a moment to process it.