Heffner Legacy: [Updated 09/05] 4.29 The Cold Shoulder

Hi everyone.
I've started the Build Newcrest Legacy Challenge and posted the first chapter. I'm all new to this and I was hoping someone would read it and tell me their opinion.
Here's the link: http://maladi.weebly.com/the-heffner-legacy.html

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4,015 Replies

mariafuchs488
10 years ago
Really great story <3 I just finished reading and I amlooking forward to the next chapters. ;)
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
"Marialein;14261210" wrote:
Really great story <3 I just finished reading and I amlooking forward to the next chapters. ;)

Thank you and welcome! Next chapter is coming very soon!
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
Beryl encounters complications in chapter 2.11.

http://s9.postimg.org/lzxbgn6bj/chapter211.png
Julyvee94
10 years ago
Omg how could they think she was involved :o I hope Tony will bail her out
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
"Julyvee94;14261748" wrote:
Omg how could they think she was involved :o I hope Tony will bail her out

In fact, the kidnapping isn't the only reason they want to talk to her at the station. :wink:
Julyvee94
10 years ago
"Maladi777;14261763" wrote:
"Julyvee94;14261748" wrote:
Omg how could they think she was involved :o I hope Tony will bail her out

In fact, the kidnapping isn't the only reason they want to talk to her at the station. :wink:

Gasp! Now I'm even more intrigued. But she would never betray Tony would she...
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
"Julyvee94;14261770" wrote:
"Maladi777;14261763" wrote:
"Julyvee94;14261748" wrote:
Omg how could they think she was involved :o I hope Tony will bail her out

In fact, the kidnapping isn't the only reason they want to talk to her at the station. :wink:

Gasp! Now I'm even more intrigued. But she would never betray Tony would she...

Well, we can't be sure. Even Tony isn't. Hopefully the help arrives in time. :)
ThePlumbobBlog
10 years ago
This is so fun! Beryl and Tony have great chemistry. Let's hope the police doesn't break her.

As for your question whether you're inconveniencing the other possible heirs with this subplot... What other possible heirs? :D
Maladi
Seasoned Ace
10 years ago
"ThePlumbob;14262590" wrote:
This is so fun! Beryl and Tony have great chemistry. Let's hope the police doesn't break her.

As for your question whether you're inconveniencing the other possible heirs with this subplot... What other possible heirs? :D

We'll see in the next chapter what they want from her.

Poor other heirs. At least Bao is taken care of. :smiley:
Sabreene
10 years ago
This was so good! I love Beryl and Tony together. And gah, Tony just puts a smile on my face, that attitude of his, lol. Can't wait for more!!