The Freezer Bunny Club - A Reading Circle
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Hi, @Skeilah ! We're stuck in meetings all day tomorrow, so I'm doing this a bit early :#
Spoiler
General
1. What were your first impressions on Liz?
2. What do you think about the concept of my Legacy Challenge? It's not a normal Legacy Challenge but one related to the MySims Trophies.
3. What do you think about the way I write my chapters?
4. My Chapters are classified in Sim days. Do you (dis)like that?
Chapters
2. Which parts in the available chapters did you (dis)like? Why is that?
3. How do you like Ninja and Brent joining the Ridley family? What are your thoughts on these characters?
4. Does everything in the story make sense for you?
5. Is the story easy to follow? Do you need more information or less?
6. What are you expecting for next episodes? (they are already played and written but not yet published but I like to see your thoughts about this)
7. Any questions for me?
1. What were your first impressions on Liz?
2. What do you think about the concept of my Legacy Challenge? It's not a normal Legacy Challenge but one related to the MySims Trophies.
3. What do you think about the way I write my chapters?
4. My Chapters are classified in Sim days. Do you (dis)like that?
Chapters
2. Which parts in the available chapters did you (dis)like? Why is that?
3. How do you like Ninja and Brent joining the Ridley family? What are your thoughts on these characters?
4. Does everything in the story make sense for you?
5. Is the story easy to follow? Do you need more information or less?
6. What are you expecting for next episodes? (they are already played and written but not yet published but I like to see your thoughts about this)
7. Any questions for me?
Spoiler
General
1. I liked her! As you already know, it really impressed me that she was randomized, yet came out looking so well. I like the possibilities for drama with her Clumsy and Gloomy trait, too (which is right in line with the Chef Gino traits and description, hehe).
2. Overall, I like it! It’s very specific in its rules, and I love how it’s tied to the Mysims trophies. I used to love collecting those in my games. I don't think I've seen someone doing this particular challenge before.One thing I’m wondering – only kids of the opposite gender can become heirs, but what happens if Liz only has daughters?
3. I like how from chapter 1.3 and onward, you’ve started having Liz comment on the in-game events in your writing. It shows a little of her personality, and it helps relate to her a little (as far as that’s possible with sims being sims, haha). I think it’s important to make her personality shine through, as well as that of her heirs later on – otherwise it’ll become easy to see them as the same person in different “skins” as the generations go by. This isn’t purely on the writer, by the way – the sims in TS4 are not really… unique in their day-to-day actions, like the ones in TS3 and TS2 were. I’m totally blaming EA for that. But that does make it harder to differentiate them over a long legacy. You're actually doing a really good job at this with both Brent and Liz in chapter 1.9!
4. I think it’s fine! I do wonder what you’ll do if/when you hit a series of days where your sims are repeating the same tasks without changing much. Will you fast forward through those days, or write them as is?
Chapters
1. I’m not entirely sure where the question went in your post, so have a heart smiley <3
2. I like the – for lack of a better word – exciting parts: Liz getting Ninja, Liz kissing Brent, her asking him to marry her immediately after the dinner party, while you the player kept checking if he was over his divorce yet (made me chuckle xD), you the player shooing Brant away - moments like that. The parts with Liz doing mundane things are a little less interesting, but part of a gameplay-driven legacy, so don’t take that as a negative! ^^ My favourite moment I think was in chapter 1.9, where it started with you having lost Brent, finding him in the bathroom, and him being annoyed at you almost all day. :D
3. I love Ninja, but you already knew that =) You the player being dead-set on Brent made me laugh, since the game tries very hard to keep those two a gay couple, to the point of Brant still trying to come over after they divorced and he got together with Liz. He’s a very good-looking sim, and I bet their children will be adorable!
4. Yup! So far, so good.
5. So far, it’s very easy to follow. Your writing is clear and to-the-point, and I like the little comments you throw in here and there. I do think Liz could have a little more personality (you’re actually doing a great job at this in chapter 1.9, both with Liz and Brent)– but again, that’s on EA more than the player. Also, I love how you have Chef Gino in a little blurb to the side of your chapters ^^
6. Since Liz seems about ready to pop, I’m expecting the next chapter or the one after that to come bearing baby news. I’m also curious who will stay home to look after the sprout when both of them need to get back to work – or are their scheduled matched up in a way that there’s always someone at home?
7. Okay, I have a few of them:
- What made you decide to do a Mysims challenge, specifically? There’s a lot of non-standard legacy challenges out there. Was there something about this one that jumped out at you?
- How does it play so far? It looks like you’re having fun writing the chapters, but how does the challenge itself play?
- Also, 20 generations is a lot, so quite a challenge! What are your thoughts on reaching that high a number?
- One thing I noticed – I can’t leave comments on individual chapters on your site. Is that on purpose?
Overall, I like your legacy so far! Liz and Brent are getting more personality with each chapter, and I'm very curious to see what their baby will look like in the future :)
1. I liked her! As you already know, it really impressed me that she was randomized, yet came out looking so well. I like the possibilities for drama with her Clumsy and Gloomy trait, too (which is right in line with the Chef Gino traits and description, hehe).
2. Overall, I like it! It’s very specific in its rules, and I love how it’s tied to the Mysims trophies. I used to love collecting those in my games. I don't think I've seen someone doing this particular challenge before.One thing I’m wondering – only kids of the opposite gender can become heirs, but what happens if Liz only has daughters?
3. I like how from chapter 1.3 and onward, you’ve started having Liz comment on the in-game events in your writing. It shows a little of her personality, and it helps relate to her a little (as far as that’s possible with sims being sims, haha). I think it’s important to make her personality shine through, as well as that of her heirs later on – otherwise it’ll become easy to see them as the same person in different “skins” as the generations go by. This isn’t purely on the writer, by the way – the sims in TS4 are not really… unique in their day-to-day actions, like the ones in TS3 and TS2 were. I’m totally blaming EA for that. But that does make it harder to differentiate them over a long legacy. You're actually doing a really good job at this with both Brent and Liz in chapter 1.9!
4. I think it’s fine! I do wonder what you’ll do if/when you hit a series of days where your sims are repeating the same tasks without changing much. Will you fast forward through those days, or write them as is?
Chapters
1. I’m not entirely sure where the question went in your post, so have a heart smiley <3
2. I like the – for lack of a better word – exciting parts: Liz getting Ninja, Liz kissing Brent, her asking him to marry her immediately after the dinner party, while you the player kept checking if he was over his divorce yet (made me chuckle xD), you the player shooing Brant away - moments like that. The parts with Liz doing mundane things are a little less interesting, but part of a gameplay-driven legacy, so don’t take that as a negative! ^^ My favourite moment I think was in chapter 1.9, where it started with you having lost Brent, finding him in the bathroom, and him being annoyed at you almost all day. :D
3. I love Ninja, but you already knew that =) You the player being dead-set on Brent made me laugh, since the game tries very hard to keep those two a gay couple, to the point of Brant still trying to come over after they divorced and he got together with Liz. He’s a very good-looking sim, and I bet their children will be adorable!
4. Yup! So far, so good.
5. So far, it’s very easy to follow. Your writing is clear and to-the-point, and I like the little comments you throw in here and there. I do think Liz could have a little more personality (you’re actually doing a great job at this in chapter 1.9, both with Liz and Brent)– but again, that’s on EA more than the player. Also, I love how you have Chef Gino in a little blurb to the side of your chapters ^^
6. Since Liz seems about ready to pop, I’m expecting the next chapter or the one after that to come bearing baby news. I’m also curious who will stay home to look after the sprout when both of them need to get back to work – or are their scheduled matched up in a way that there’s always someone at home?
7. Okay, I have a few of them:
- What made you decide to do a Mysims challenge, specifically? There’s a lot of non-standard legacy challenges out there. Was there something about this one that jumped out at you?
- How does it play so far? It looks like you’re having fun writing the chapters, but how does the challenge itself play?
- Also, 20 generations is a lot, so quite a challenge! What are your thoughts on reaching that high a number?
- One thing I noticed – I can’t leave comments on individual chapters on your site. Is that on purpose?
Overall, I like your legacy so far! Liz and Brent are getting more personality with each chapter, and I'm very curious to see what their baby will look like in the future :)
