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"BlackUndecimber;c-17818740" wrote:
My answers below:

Spoiler

1. Is the story different from what you expected to see? If so, how?
I didn’t go in with expectations, but nothing was as expected, and it was a surprise at every turn!

2. What part of the story do you like the most? What's your least favorite part?
Part I liked most: I really enjoyed all the screenshots. They were expressive and colourful, and supported the text well. I also liked how you took the time to show off various locations in the sims world. I love Sulani!
Least favourite part: Though I liked how Zelda had her weak moments, she had to be rescued by her boyfriend at many crucial moments, and I feel like we could have seen her develop more if she was given the chance to save herself.

Thanks for your comments on the screenshots. Sulani is one of my favorite worlds, too.

I've thought about those crucial moments, too. Well, I'll try not to use the damsel trope too often. I'll probably give Zelda a chance to develop more.

Characters
3. Were you able to connect with the characters on some level? Were they believable?
Yup, the characters were multifaceted and well-rounded. Each character had more than one defining trait and faults, which interacted well during the story. I am particularly drawn to repentant or misunderstood antagonists, so I quite liked Meredith. I felt pretty bad for her too.
A thing that hindered my connection with the characters was how little they reacted to so much. For example, Zelda witnesses her father murdering her mother, and she just walks away calmly and packs her bags. Later, when she sees Mark while shopping with Ayame, she understandably avoids him. But I didn’t get the feeling she was scared or angry- it read like she ‘didn’t really feel like talking to him that day’. As someone who reacts rather emotionally to a lot of things, this was hard to understand.

I'll think more about the characters' reactions in the next story.

4. Do they feel similar in terms of personalities and dialogue? Or are they different?
They didn’t have different ways of talking or anything, but I never got confused between two characters so I’d say yeah, they were pretty distinct. They had traits that set them apart from one other. There are some characters for whom I wish their traits were explored more, but I understand that they aren’t important to the plot.

I prefer my characters to be distinct. Sometimes others don't play as much of a part in the story.

5. Which character do you relate to the most?
Like I said above, I quite like Meredith, and even if I would never grow as bitter and vengeful as her, I do understand why she became that way.



Writing
6. Do any parts of the story feel too quick or too slow? What do you think of the story's pace in general?
It flowed along at a nice brisk pace which I enjoy. There was no dawdling around between events. Even relaxing chapters like the Sulani vacation introduced new things to the story. I really like the pacing.

That's what I thought, too.

7. How do you view the wordless parts/scenes? Were they hard to understand, or did the pictures speak for themselves?
I am a big fan of these parts, no words are needed as the screenshots tell the story adequately by themselves.


8. What do you think of the flashback scenes? Did they help you understand the characters a little more, or were they unnecessary to the plot?
They held important information to the characters’ backstories so they helped develop those characters more. Even if they didn’t necessarily move the plot forward, they added extra depth to the story. I am a big fan of backstory, so it could also be fun to explore other ways of integrating past events into the story too!

I like backstories, too.

Miscallaneous
9. Season 2 is coming up soon. What are your predictions for the upcoming season?
Zelda and Braeden have kids, one of them gets together with Ayame and Kalani’s child and another gets together with Ragnar and Ciara’s child. Speaking of Ragnar’s child he is an antagonist like his father but then meets Zelda and Braden’s youngest daughter and falls in love, leading to his redemption.
Ragnar dies again.

Those were interesting predictions, but the next story might surprise you.

10. Which characters do you hope to see more of?
Kalani, for sure. I don’t really know him at all, he didn’t get much screen time and we saw none of his friends or family. I also would be interested to see what mermaid culture is like too!

I'll think about this.

"DeafSimmer;c-17823720" wrote:
Here comes the second generation. Well, let me know if Ragnar's making sense. I intend to make him a well-rounded antagonist.
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