What do you think of my storyline? Sisters.

"AlexSimmerman;d-967836" wrote:
The story is about two sisters and an event which merged their very different lives, after not speaking for years...

Luisa who was an aspiring actress, she married Anton, a successful athlete, and they had a child. As she returned back to work, she discovered she was pregnant again, and after trying to juggle two children and her career, they decided she’d give up work to raise their children. The years passed and Luisa had 2 more children. As Anton’s career took off, she was often left alone raising 4 children which became more tiring by the day. She began losing contact with friends, going out less until she became isolated, confined to the walls of her home. In desperation, Luisa packed her bags one night and made the heartbreaking decision to leave her family to ‘find’ herself again.....

Miranda, an author, unhappily married to Carter, a detective, heard about her sister’s disappearance and decided to leave her home in San Myshuno to check in on her nieces and nephew at her sister’s home in Willow Creek. After seeing how much Anton was struggling with the children; she told her husband she was extending her visit to take care of them. As the weeks went on, Anton & Miranda got closer and have began a relationship.

It’s been 6 months since Luisa left her family; she’s been living in Sulani, got her body back in shape, found her passion for life again and is thinking of returning to her family. However, with each passing day, it’s becoming harder to find the courage to go home.

Miranda knows her husband is getting suspicious and she’s due home soon. However, she’s in her element, she always wanted children but after years of trying unsuccessfully, her husband made the decision to give up. Now she finally feels as though she has a chance to be a mother?

What should happen next? What do you think of my story? (It’s worth noting that the sisters haven’t spoke for 7 years for unknown reasons)

I'd have Carter show up out of the blue when he finds details on where his wife went, desperate to know she is okay and because he is a detective. He then sees his wife snogging another man as he walks up to the house. Carter is heartbroken and Miranda is feeling especially guilty about that but is so torn about what to do. She runs after her husband to try and explain herself and it creates a love triangle as Anton is starting to become jealous this man is about to steal Miranda away and has a secret desire to have both sisters to himself!

Luisa somehow finds out and courage or not, a family confrontation begins, an awkward, angry, embarassing confrontation that could last for years. Can you imagine the fireworks behind that one, more so with the sisters not speaking to each other since!