Welcome to the reading circle, (In it for) the Long Haul!
This reading circle is for legacy writers. Traditional, Build Newcrest, Differences in the Family Tree etc. It doesn’t matter if you’re following the rules strictly or not. If you’re writing/ chronicling the story of your legacy family, this is the place for you.
If you are fairly early in your legacy (Generation 1 or Generation 2), we’d be happy for you to join this reading circle. This will be a place for us to encourage each other as we trek up legacy mountain.
Not only will we provide encouragement for each other, but we can discuss issues we’re having and plot ideas. Also, there will be the potential for some great crossovers and great legacy spouses that originate in someone else’s game!
There are no strict rules, although I would hope if you join that you would read everyone’s story and comment either on this thread or on their blog.
@PurplishSimEater Oh wow, I'm flattered! That's so sweet of you to say; thanks for the praise! If you're reading regularly, I'd really like to hear any thoughts on the story you might have. I'm always looking for ways to improve!
@Asaoyoru and @ny275 Thanks for the vote of approval on my circle application! ;)
@MVWdeZT Looks like we squeezed in here together! Haha!
Can't wait to get caught up on the stories I haven't checked out. Please give me the weekend to catch up! I'm pretty excited to talk shop with all of you. This will be so much fun!
I'm trying to catch up with all the stories, but I do want to write some commentary on each of them. As for me, you can call me Marian, or tag me. I've bookmarked this thread, so I hope I won't miss anything.
Any and all comments are welcome. You can either comment in this thread, in the thread "The Straud Dynasty" here on the official forum, or, if you're a member of Carl's Forum, over there.
I've enjoyed reading about Elias's struggles with Siobhan. I'm glad I skimmed over this thread, though, because I was a little confused to find that he suddenly had a girlfriend named Ava and Siobhan was pregnant. I'm very sorry to hear about your losing the save -- that does tend to throw a curveball, but I'm glad you're trying to reconcile the two versions. I won't even try to predict where you're going with the triangle (Elias might not think there's a rivalry, but there is). I think a pomegranate orchard sounds lovely, and I'm looking forward to your next update!
Hey everyone! Welcome to the new circle members, @MVWdeZT, @jbestxoxo, and @allysimbuilds!
I know I only have a couple of chapters up, but I'm working on getting more out, I promise. I was taking a break to catch up on some stories, and so you all are joining at the right time (for me personally, lol).
For those who are already past Gen 2, I may just jump in wherever you are right now, especially for the stories with more chapters. But I'm looking forward to meeting your heirs and their families!
For my story, I would suggest reading the first chapter at least, because that provides the set-up information. After that, you can dive in anywhere. The table of contents has a picture of each heir (I decided to go with all 3 of Vlad's children), so pick someone you like and start reading.
@allysimbuilds, I don't think a reading time is necessary, but that's just my opinion. I plan to read all of yours, though, and got through the first 2 chapters pretty quickly.
Hi everyone!!! I am slowly working my way though everyone's stories.
Once I am finished I'll leave a more detailed comment, but I absolutely love all the legacies I've read so far and each character from each story is so unique! :)
Okay, finished reading everyone's stuff. Just to be clear, everyone got my 2-cents on how to improve their story (like a writer's workshop). Take the advice, or leave it--it's your work, and you have the final say! But don't take offense in it, as none is intended. I just wanted to offer something other than the pure encouragement I would normally give, and I hope you do the same for me! >:) If you don't feel like you got the criticism you wanted, or have a question, feel free to ask about it! Again, everything is meant as friendly critique.
Okay, here we go *inhales a massively deep breath*:
I've been reading your stuff for quite a while now, but here we're focusing on your Castillo legacy. The dialogue and relationship development is great, everything flows and makes a lot of sense as a reader. As a writer, I feel that Ava hasn't been developed very much. Rather, she was kind of just thrown in there. Maybe taking a little time to explore her character, and the relationship she has with Elias a little more, would be beneficial in the near future. I was really interested by the pomegranate farming, but there isn't too much focus on those plants. It was mentioned in the very first post, so I expected it to be a bigger part of the story. Just food for thought! Keep up the good work!
I've also been reading your project for a bit, and for the life of me can't remember how I found you. ny275? Did you comment on something I did? Were you recommended to me? I can't remember... "1.5 So We Meet Again" was actually my favorite chapter thus far, which is kind of ironic as there aren't any words...haha. I just really liked the break in style; it felt like a breath of fresh air and set the tone for what was to come. Perhaps major life events could be done in this way, as a break from the normal style, to emphasize their importance?
I'd never seen a picturacy before, but I really like the concept. I, for whatever reason, felt three pictures wasn't enough for a single day, but I'm not sure how many photos would be "enough." Maybe I just wanted more? And that's the point, isn't it? The photos speak for themselves, but also allow the reader to add their own meaning to the story. It's a great concept that gets the reader more involved, allows them to feel as though they have a sense of ownership in their story, (which might be why I liked Asaoyoru's 1.5 chapter so much). It's a super neat concept and I can't wait to see how the project changes and grows in the future; it's almost like an art piece!
Nivea's voice and your character development are great. As a reader, I really feel like I know Nivea and I want to root for her success and happiness in the worst way. Like, I'm strapped in for the ride. Lol. My only question as a new reader is: was Nivea's past another project you'd done? It certainly came across that way to me, and I wanted a link to that project in order to check it out. If not, you certainly did a good job convincing me that it was--excellent backstory!
Brittany is quite the character, lol. To me, her voice is so snarky and sarcastic; it's great and has me giggling! The use of Spanish is great, I really like that touch. The switch to Joaquin's perspective was a tad jarring, but I did like the perspective he gave! If you're intending to switch back and forth with perspectives, that would be a great touch to the story. Have you read Day & Knight? If not, check it out. You'd probably like that style piece!
Love the dialogue you'e got in your story. It's really good and engrossing! The things Ev feels, the choices she makes, I really get to understand her well through your dialogue and descriptions! Maybe taking a little time to develop the character of love interests, without diving into their POV, would be beneficial. So, broadening side character's through Ev's perspective, so the reader knows a little more about why Ev feels the way she does about people. Focus a little more on the why, as who/what/when/where are great! I'm still in Gen 1, so I'll comment on that. If things have changed in the future, just ignore my ramble! :D
I read the first section of the legacy, and quite enjoyed it. Haven't dove into the latter generations yet. At first, the idea of following all the children made me nervous, but it's a really interesting concept...one that I may very well do in the future. You've clearly put a lot of effort into the project, and your writing shows it. You have a very unique voice that's really enjoyable. Like I'm one to talk, but some of the paragraphs may be a little long for web reading. Sometimes I felt a little overwhelmed by the text blocks, which other readers may feel as well. BUT the work reads like a printed piece, not a web piece, so...in the end I don't really think it's anything to worry about. Otherwise, I really like reading the story, and will probably get caught up in the next two weeks!
"allysimbuilds;c-15928238" wrote: Okay, finished reading everyone's stuff. Just to be clear, everyone got my 2-cents on how to improve their story (like a writer's workshop). Take the advice, or leave it--it's your work, and you have the final say! But don't take offense in it, as none is intended. I just wanted to offer something other than the pure encouragement I would normally give, and I hope you do the same for me! >:) If you don't feel like you got the criticism you wanted, or have a question, feel free to ask about it! Again, everything is meant as friendly critique.
Okay, here we go *inhales a massively deep breath*:
I've been reading your stuff for quite a while now, but here we're focusing on your Castillo legacy. The dialogue and relationship development is great, everything flows and makes a lot of sense as a reader. As a writer, I feel that Ava hasn't been developed very much. Rather, she was kind of just thrown in there. Maybe taking a little time to explore her character, and the relationship she has with Elias a little more, would be beneficial in the near future. I was really interested by the pomegranate farming, but there isn't too much focus on those plants. It was mentioned in the very first post, so I expected it to be a bigger part of the story. Just food for thought! Keep up the good work!
I've also been reading your project for a bit, and for the life of me can't remember how I found you. ny275? Did you comment on something I did? Were you recommended to me? I can't remember... "1.5 So We Meet Again" was actually my favorite chapter thus far, which is kind of ironic as there aren't any words...haha. I just really liked the break in style; it felt like a breath of fresh air and set the tone for what was to come. Perhaps major life events could be done in this way, as a break from the normal style, to emphasize their importance?
I'd never seen a picturacy before, but I really like the concept. I, for whatever reason, felt three pictures wasn't enough for a single day, but I'm not sure how many photos would be "enough." Maybe I just wanted more? And that's the point, isn't it? The photos speak for themselves, but also allow the reader to add their own meaning to the story. It's a great concept that gets the reader more involved, allows them to feel as though they have a sense of ownership in their story, (which might be why I liked Asaoyoru's 1.5 chapter so much). It's a super neat concept and I can't wait to see how the project changes and grows in the future; it's almost like an art piece!
Nivea's voice and your character development are great. As a reader, I really feel like I know Nivea and I want to root for her success and happiness in the worst way. Like, I'm strapped in for the ride. Lol. My only question as a new reader is: was Nivea's past another project you'd done? It certainly came across that way to me, and I wanted a link to that project in order to check it out. If not, you certainly did a good job convincing me that it was--excellent backstory!
Brittany is quite the character, lol. To me, her voice is so snarky and sarcastic; it's great and has me giggling! The use of Spanish is great, I really like that touch. The switch to Joaquin's perspective was a tad jarring, but I did like the perspective he gave! If you're intending to switch back and forth with perspectives, that would be a great touch to the story. Have you read Day & Knight? If not, check it out. You'd probably like that style piece!
Love the dialogue you'e got in your story. It's really good and engrossing! The things Ev feels, the choices she makes, I really get to understand her well through your dialogue and descriptions! Maybe taking a little time to develop the character of love interests, without diving into their POV, would be beneficial. So, broadening side character's through Ev's perspective, so the reader knows a little more about why Ev feels the way she does about people. Focus a little more on the why, as who/what/when/where are great! I'm still in Gen 1, so I'll comment on that. If things have changed in the future, just ignore my ramble! :D
I read the first section of the legacy, and quite enjoyed it. Haven't dove into the latter generations yet. At first, the idea of following all the children made me nervous, but it's a really interesting concept...one that I may very well do in the future. You've clearly put a lot of effort into the project, and your writing shows it. You have a very unique voice that's really enjoyable. Like I'm one to talk, but some of the paragraphs may be a little long for web reading. Sometimes I felt a little overwhelmed by the text blocks, which other readers may feel as well. BUT the work reads like a printed piece, not a web piece, so...in the end I don't really think it's anything to worry about. Otherwise, I really like reading the story, and will probably get caught up in the next two weeks!
@allysimbuilds I know about the pictures. My original plan was to do it tumblr style, have lots of pictures and a few captions but it hasn't worked as well as I would have liked. So I will be changing the formation of future chapters etc to be a lot more of a mixture to reflect this.
@cecerose0208, Nivea is gorgeous! I love the ISBI challenge -- it was practically the first one I tried with TS4. The story I'm working on now is a variation -- I get to control all the Sims for 24 Sim hours every time my torch holder accumulates 10 points (different point system from the one you're using).
So Don Lothario behaves better than usual? That's good to hear. I want to see more of Nivea's story and how things work out for her and Khaled. Also, I had to laugh at her being used to breakfast being fixed by the butler.
Joaquin is one of my favorite townies, so I hope Brittany has the good sense to marry him. I like Paolo, too -- but it appears he has something going with Sergio in your story. Glad that you're using Joaquin as a narrator, part of the time at least. Roommates in legacies don't get enough love.
@cecerose0208, yes I think I did come up with the variation. I was trying to come up with a challenge that I would really enjoy, and my only complaint with the ISBI challenge was that you could never do anything with the other household members. In a moment of Sim-brilliance, I realized you could use the points to gain a day when you could control them, and I've really enjoyed the result.
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